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RP Avatar By star toad
POSTED: 13 May 2011 19:29
CATEGORY: Miscellaneous

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Savii I was in the school field alone shivirring in the dark how much longer could she take!?It was my mum shes always late picking me up but this long no I don't remember her taking this long to pick me up.And owl howled in the grey sky as a fast gust of wind nearlly blue me over.FINELLY!my mum had arrived!

I angrelly stomped into the car and every time she tried to talk to me I ignored her and at tea time I was so angry I had lost my appitite.son it was night and time for me to go to sleep.It was night and I had left my certtin open. As I settled down to go to sleep I noticed a flash of light just ahead of me and I no I'm sure I saw a owl could it of been that owl I saw in the field?mayby.
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Comments

Avatar Silent C
14 Nov 2011 00:51
Cool.
Avatar star toad
05 Sep 2011 07:23
thank you
Avatar XxCoccoxX
31 May 2011 01:04
keeeeeewl
ur european too?!!
AAAAWWWWSUUUUM
P.S nice story ^-^
Avatar star toad
20 May 2011 16:32
thxs
Avatar Girl-pie
14 May 2011 16:03
Bigtr, americans will understand shes not from america, and thats ok. Plus, YOU didnt even spell some of those mistakes right. BUt other than that, AWESOME STORY STAR! I never knew you were from Europe!
Avatar BIGtrist1000
14 May 2011 06:34
Theres 5 mistakes:

certtin=Curtin
angrelly=angrly
FINELLY=FINALLY
Shiverring=shivering

and you need spaces after . (full stop) and , (comma) example: "ahhh." the man shouted, "Help." he then said. The next day he was ok.
Avatar BIGtrist1000
14 May 2011 06:28
I know your only 9 but please try to improve your spelling's.
And remember american people might not understand, cause your writing in proper english. But in america etc mum is mom.
I understand it cause i live in england, but keep the american's in mind!!
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