The next morning I woke to the feel of bubbles popping on my face... "Thanks alot Piplup..." I said still half asleep. Then I got out of bed, got some good clothes on, then walked out the door with my two pokemon happily following behind me. I decided that today, I would pick up ten pokeballs from the local pokemart, then look for some more pokemon to catch. So I picked up the pokeballs then started towards a mountain. Once I had got to the base of the mountain, I looked around for a new pokemon to catch. There was no pokemon in sight! But then, I saw an orange thing behind a rock! So, very carefully, I commanded Piplup to use bubble. The little water pokemon then opened his mouth, and shot bubbles at the orange figure, knocking it to the ground. "Now what did you do that for!?" Came a voice behind the rock. The "orange thing" came out from behind the rock and stared at me angrily. It wasn't a pokemon at all! It was a digger searching for fossils! "s s sorry," I stammered, "I thought you were a pokemon...". "That's ok," The man said "hey... You've got some pokemon! Let's battle!". So I accepted his challenge and we started to battle. "Machop! I choose you!" The man shouted. "Alright... Starly! Go!" I said. Then the little bird pokemon stood in front of the human-like machop with determination. "Machop! Use low kick!" he said. "Starly! Fly out of the way then use wing attack!". and so the fight began... Starly flew out of the way just before the kick hit him then he retaliated with a swift wing attack. But that was all it took to defeat the Machop... So Machop fainted and I had won the battle! My Starly flew on to my shoulder and squawked happily. "Star! Starly!" It said sweetly. "Very good!" The man said, "here... Take this lightening stone as a prize! I don't have any use for it...". So he handed me a shiny yellow stone. "what does it do?" I asked. "It makes a Pikachu evolve into a Raichu! And also some other electric pokemon evolve too...". "Cool! I wanted to catch a Raichu...". With that, I left the man and walked along the base of the mountain when I came across a rare pokemon! it was blue and stood on two feet like a human... It had two fox-like ears and was quite small... And I really wanted to catch it!
grrrr... every1 thinks i've got it wrong... but i haven't! the spelling is fine, and apart from there being no paragraphs, this story is fine!!! Tora- perhaps + maybe = Mayhaps? lol
It seems to go too fast, maybe you could elaborate on some details. Mayhaps a few spelling issues could be fixed as well? Other than that, I like this series. Why don't you check out my series as an example?