Before the plane crashed, Jack looked down. "It's the icewarriors!" Jack yelled.
"These are the Yugs. They're protecting the Ancient Snowflake. They're skinny with heads no bigger than their hips." Said Glane.
"Oh, no! We're gonna crash!" Said Sarah hopelessly.
"No, we're not." Said Glane.
He waved his wand, and said some magic words. "Caz-lo-miek!" He said. The spell created some kind of an energy shield. It helped the plane from not crashing.
After they got down from the plane, Glane waved his wand at the Yugs. The icicles that the Yugs were shooting went back towards them. They fleed away.
After a while, a man from the the lost snowfolk came to them. "Hello. Me Biggle. Me see you. You strong!" Said Biggle. "Hi, I'm Sarah, nice to meet you."
Then, after the eskimos met him, Glane followed a sound coming from a cave... "Hey, Glane?" Said Eric. "Where are you going?"
Glane kept heading for the cave as he have heard nothing from Eric.
Eric was afraid, so he followed him.
His group went behind him. After a while in the cave, Eric saw Glane on the other side. Glane was touching a wall... as if he was hearing sound from it... after a while, Glane suddenly went through the ice wall! As if something was grabbing him fast! "GLANE!!" Yelled Eric.
After That, Eric hurried and picked his staff from the other side... he felt really sad...
Moving on the cave, the teens found few sleds. They hopped on them.
"How does this sled work?" Asked Eric.
"You lean. Sled go."Said Biggle.
"Wow, did you make this?"Asked Melly.
"No, me no make this. Blue Dragon did."Said Biggle.
"The Blue Dragon?! Didn't he melt the ice burgs?! Or was our legend wrong?" Said Sarah.
"Noo, Blue Dragon good." Said Biggle.
After a while, they say some light. "I can see some daylight!" Said Eric.
After they went out of the cave, they saw a low canyon, with a river in the bottom.
They looked down at the river, and saw the missing snowfolk! They waved at them, but they didn't wave back... they looked afraid... so the group felt wierd, and turned around. The entrance to the cave has been blocked by snow! And there were Yugs near it!
What will happen next?
Continuing in part 3.
Your spelling and grammar throughout is generally a sight for sore eyes (very good), but the story itself is very rushed and summarised. You skip over large details and it feels like a very brief summary of a story, rather than a story. Try padding it out a little with a few more details and events.