so today all over youtube coppa want youtube to shut down because of non kid friendly video and here is my response: Youtube is for everyone kid, adult, and elderly and i think that youtube should not get shutdown as known that will efect google, and other but not only that that will also take efect on content creator losing their job and money as also will probably charge with a huge fine for each video and that will mean they can not post or whatch video we have an age restricted meaning that if you are under 18 you cant whatch this video because it might have inappropriate stuff in it and also we have youtube kid so theres only kid friendly video and this is why youtube should not shutdown.
Good persuading essay, just improve capitalization on the names like Youtube and beginning of sentences, and some grammar, make it longer and at least have 3 paragraph with intro, 1-3 body, and 1 conclusion. Intro is your opinion and all your reasons, body is for each of your reasons and proof, and finally conclusion to summarize it all up, this will lead to a featured blog. hope it works. :p