September 15th 2036 4:02am
Motoko lied there on the cold floor of a large grey room. The cold hard tiles pressed against her skin leaving inprints. Tick! Tick! Tick! Motoko's eyes opened widely staring at the strange unfamiliar ceiling. She sat up and look around the nearly empty room searching her thoughts trying to figure out whats going on. Tick! Tick! Tick! Ding! She jumped back quickly when a row of spikes arose from the floor. "Wha?" She stood up and headed for a open door beside her. The room was a blood red. It seemed to be a bedroom, Motoko walk inside over to a black desk with several photos on it. Tick!! Tick!! Tick!! the ticking was back again but even louder."Where is that ticking coming from?!" She searched the room under the bed, in the desk, in the dresser,last a small box by the door but the box was locked and it required a combination, she put the small box in her backpack. She sighed. She went through all the photos on the desk, some of them had years on the back others had times.The ticking had stopped, she looked around the room confused. Ding! Ding! All the doors started to close. She managed to slip under the door into the next room. A tall woman tackled Motoko and spoke in a different language."I don't understand!" Motoko said. The woman slapped Motoko "Who are you and why are you here?!" Motoko pushed the woman off of her pulled out her sword and put it to her neck "I don't know how I got here OK and WHO ARE YOU?" The woman narrow her eyes "I don't no who I am I just woke up here!" Motoko put her sword away and sat in a chair at a table with numbers carved in it. "So how long have you been up?" Motoko asked "I've been awake for about and hour now" the woman said. Motoko noticed light coming from the sides of a bookshelf by the table she told the woman to come over and check it out. they tryed to push and pull the book shelf to open it."there has to be a way to open it" the woman said "Lets take all the books off the shelf" [out of space]TBC
Errrmmm... I don't sense a tone or feel compelled to read more. Try making the next one longer, remember to split your writing into paragraphs and check spelling, and don't try and leave us on a cliffhanger until we have a reason to care Just some advice.